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Bad subordinate (dangling modifier; mistaken subject)

"Sleeping in my orchard, a serpent stung me", Hamlet

 

Instead of:  Being reluctant participants, the game facilitator decided to debrief at length.,

Write:  The game facilitator decided to debrief at length because the participants were reluctant.

Instead of:  Originally designed as a simulation about cultural diversity, we have used this activity to explore how outsiders are recruited to join a team.,

Write:  This simulation was originally about cultural diversity, but we have used it to explore the ways in which outsiders are recruited to join a team.

Instead of:  Based on these four barriers to complex dynamic decision making, we designed an instructional and learning strategy

Write:  Using these four barriers to complex dynamic decision making, we designed an instructional and learning strategy

Instead of:  Summarizing it briefly, participants in BLEND (the original ILE) play

Write:  To summarize, we can say that participants in BLEND play ...

Instead of:  Based upon current recommendations for gamifying classrooms (Sheldon, 2012), a course at Syracuse University was gamified by adding

Write:   Using current recommendations for gamifying classrooms, Sheldon (2012) gamified a course at Syracuse University by adding

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